The First Paragraph

This is the first paragraph of my novel…. what do you think?

They told her not to pack anything. Nothing at all. Well, they could forget it. There was no way she was going to live another life, in another country, as a different species, without her teddy bear. Admittedly, she was perhaps too old for a teddy bear, today was her eighteenth birthday after all. But still. She’d had it since she was a baby and she refused to let them take him away from her.  With a sigh, she stood up from her bed, and picked up her beloved bear. She looked behind her as she walked out the door and smiled. She had long since come to terms with her betrothal to Crown Prince Tareq Dragonrider of Risir and she was glad to finally feel like something was happening in her life, like she was finally getting out of an endless cycle of lessons and being treated like a child. She also heard that they didn’t wear corsets in Risir, which she had to admit she was somewhat excited about.


6 Comments Add yours

    1. Keira says:

      Thank you!

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  1. mahjabeen says:

    OMG!!sound sooo sooo soo good!!already got my attention, in the first few sentences, and im a very picky reader!!!fab work!!

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    1. Keira says:

      Thank you!!

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      1. mahjabeen says:


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